Amy I hope you don't mind, but I really liked it that you offered a HM Forces discount, so I decided to too, esp as so many of my friends are out there fighting for us.
Oh, of course I don't mind! That's why I do it too, and even punters who are not in the Forces seem to like the idea.
I'd really appreciate some feedback, negative, constructive, whatever, as you all have much more experience than me at being Indie.
I think the site looks great, and it really goes to show what can be done with these free site builders if you have an aptitude for it (not like me
) If you want someone to get
really nitpicky:
The 'Hi, I'm Marilyn' could do with being spaced a bit further from the paragraph underneath as the tail of the 'y' is touching it and looks a bit untidy. This paragraph needs spacing after 'travel'.
You have the words 'wonderful' and 'wonderfully' three times in fairly rapid succession on the first page, and given that there aren't a lot of words in total, that's a whole lot of wonderful
. Maybe change at least one to something else (delightfully, enduringly, seductively, beautifully...). 'Airports' doesn't need to be capitalised.
I would maybe change 'email bookings only' to 'email enquiries only' just so it's clear that you will talk on the phone at some point before the appointment - some men might not want to commit to a concrete booking of ?xxx without having spoken to you at least briefly first.
In 'Services', 'affection' needs a comma after. I found the bit of pink text that runs onto the fishnets a bit hard to read, but it's clear enough what it says so it's hardly crucial. And your photos are fab - you can properly see what you look like which is great, but does Moonfruit allow you to go from one to the next without having to close them and go back to the thumbnails?
Testimonials are all very well, but a lot of punters don't take them seriously; if you've got a few reviews on other sites try to put actual links to them in rather than copying and pasting in your own text. If you want to publish nice bits out of 'thank you' emails you've been sent, it's best to check with your client first, just so they know.
On 'Rates', 'additional' needs a capital letter. I would separate the last sentence into it's own paragraph so it's clear that it applies to everybody and not just Forces clients (or if it is aimed at them, make the whole thing one paragraph without the break). The actual numerical fees are a bit staggered - could Tab get the first few in line vertically?
The pink script on the 'Contact' page is a bit far to the left and touching the edge of the frame so I would move it in a little for tidiness. I promise that's it! The site is really brill and I would be very proud of it
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As far as advertising your number goes, it's six and two threes really; I don't answer my phone that often once the day's confirmation calls are out of the way and tend to keep it on vibrate - my website does have the number but also states that the best way to contact me is email and that is how I take most of my bookings. I have found that most initial contact made by phone is from people who want same day bookings which I don't really offer, but if you plan on taking these I would say a phone number would probably be a good idea unless (like me) you really hate talking on it
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You could always advertise the number but keep the actual phone switched off? Record a clear and friendly voicemail message (and remind callers that the best way to contact you is by email), and then people who want to leave you a message can and you can check them at your convenience, like an answering service.
Topic: Right, have set up my own indie website, feedback needed! (Read 4568 times)